[gentoo-doc-cvs] gentoo commit in xml/htdocs/doc/en: power-management-guide.xml

[Sven Vermeulen (swift)]

swift       13/04/07 13:25:29

  Modified:             power-management-guide.xml
  Log:
  Update wording in powermanagement guide, makes sentences a bit more readable. Thanks to Jose Fournier for suggesting this

Revision  Changes    Path
1.53                 xml/htdocs/doc/en/power-management-guide.xml

file : http://sources.gentoo.org/viewvc.cgi/gentoo/xml/htdocs/doc/en/power-management-guide.xml?rev=1.53&view=markup
plain: http://sources.gentoo.org/viewvc.cgi/gentoo/xml/htdocs/doc/en/power-management-guide.xml?rev=1.53&content-type=text/plain
diff : http://sources.gentoo.org/viewvc.cgi/gentoo/xml/htdocs/doc/en/power-management-guide.xml?r1=1.52&r2=1.53

Index: power-management-guide.xml
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RCS file: /var/cvsroot/gentoo/xml/htdocs/doc/en/power-management-guide.xml,v
retrieving revision 1.52
retrieving revision 1.53
diff -u -r1.52 -r1.53
--- power-management-guide.xml	14 Jan 2013 06:19:27 -0000	1.52
+++ power-management-guide.xml	7 Apr 2013 13:25:29 -0000	1.53
@@ -1,6 +1,6 @@
 <?xml version='1.0' encoding="UTF-8"?>
 <!DOCTYPE guide SYSTEM "/dtd/guide.dtd">
-<!-- $Header: /var/cvsroot/gentoo/xml/htdocs/doc/en/power-management-guide.xml,v 1.52 2013/01/14 06:19:27 nightmorph Exp $ -->
+<!-- $Header: /var/cvsroot/gentoo/xml/htdocs/doc/en/power-management-guide.xml,v 1.53 2013/04/07 13:25:29 swift Exp $ -->
 
 <guide>
 <title>Power Management Guide</title>
@@ -21,8 +21,8 @@
 <!-- See http://creativecommons.org/licenses/by-sa/2.5 -->
 <license/>
 
-<version>7</version>
-<date>2013-01-13</date>
+<version>8</version>
+<date>2013-04-07</date>
 
 <chapter>
 <title>Introduction</title>
@@ -321,20 +321,24 @@
 
 <ul>
   <li>
-    <e>Battery</e>, in the configuration files using the <c>BATT_</c> prefix, is
-    active when the system is running on battery power
+    <e>Battery</e>, which is active when the system is running on battery power;
+    the configuration files use the <c>BATT_</c> prefix for settings related to
+    this state
   </li>
   <li>
-    <e>AC</e>, in the configuration files using the <c>AC_</c> prefix, is active
-    when the system is running on AC power
+    <e>AC</e>, which is active when the system is running on AC power;
+    the configuration files use the <c>AC_</c> prefix for settings related to
+    this state
   </li>
   <li>
-    <e>Laptop Mode</e>, in the configuration files using the <c>LM_</c> prefix,
-    is active when <e>laptop mode</e> is enabled
+    <e>Laptop Mode</e>, which is active when <e>laptop mode</e> is enabled;
+    the configuration files use the <c>LM_</c> prefix for settings related to
+    this state
   </li>
   <li>
-    <e>No Laptop Mode</e>, in the configuration files using the <c>NOLM_</c>
-    prefix, is active when <e>laptop mode</e> is disabled
+    <e>No Laptop Mode</e>, which is active when <e>laptop mode</e> is disabled;
+    the configuration files use the <c>NOLM_</c> prefix for settings related to
+    this state
   </li>
 </ul>