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Sven Vermeulen wrote: |
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> Hi all |
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> I've quickly made two handouts. The first one is based on our about page, |
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> the second one is more personal :) |
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> http://dev.gentoo.org/~swift/pr/aboutgentoo-1.pdf |
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s/healty/healthy/ |
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s/--/-/ (long dash) or at least, don't let -- be hyphened. |
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emerge packagename : <cursive>packagename</cursive> |
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s/Gentoo has an extensive documentation/Gentoo has extensive documentation/ |
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It looks a bit crammed when printed. Maybe a slight increase of letter spacing |
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could help? |
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Maybe you should align headers and text. |
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How does it look with justified text? |
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> http://dev.gentoo.org/~swift/pr/aboutgentoo-2.pdf |
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What's the point of '"cow" doesn't always mean female' ? |
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Cow does not always mean bovine either. |
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If it's humour, it does not work. |
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page 1 has www@g.o, use it here as well. |
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"We produce Gentoo, a top-notch Linux distribution" (Add Linux) |
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s/wether your/whether you are/ (maybe a wether would get along with Larry ;-)) |
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s/solutions/solution/ (searching for a....solution) |
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s/testing ,/testting,/ |
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Again, I would try to align headers with the text and justify it. |
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IMHO, blue text should not use same blue as links, or no blue at all. |
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Linux should be followed by tm and Linus' trademark should be acknowledged. |
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Could you copy the scribus files to your dev space? |
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Just 2% of whichever currency in turbo mode, gotta go, maybe more later. |
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Cheers, |
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-- |
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/ Xavier Neys |
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\_ Gentoo Documentation Project |
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/ French & Internationalisation Lead |
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\ http://www.gentoo.org/doc/en |
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