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Sven Vermeulen posted <20040911113639.GB9039@g.o>, excerpted below, |
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on Sat, 11 Sep 2004 13:36:39 +0200: |
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> On Fri, Sep 10, 2004 at 10:35:14AM -0700, Duncan wrote: |
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>> I did notice the contrasted wording between the two clauses, |
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>> * free knowledge... contributed by /various/ /developers/.. |
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>> * free software... developed by /various/ /Gentoo/ /developers/.. |
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>> Was the omission of the word /Gentoo/ in the first case intentional? |
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> It was, but it looks like it's better if I remove "Gentoo" from both |
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> clauses. Concerning "Gentoo", we shouldn't make any difference between |
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> Gentoo and non-Gentoo developers. |
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> Updated the proposal. |
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Cool! =:^) |
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Here's the link again, so I don't have to go find it in the upline <g>: |
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http://dev.gentoo.org/~swift/contract.html |
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OK with that, but now this looks strange: |
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Gentoo is the collection of: |
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* [...] |
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* free software developed by various developers and contributed to the |
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Gentoo project |
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"free software /developed/ by various /developers/"? Developed/developers |
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is just repetitive enough to be grating to my thought process. |
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/Definitely/ nitpicking, but what about this for that bullet item? Just |
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leave out the "by various developers and", leaving: |
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* free software contributed to the Gentoo project |
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or maybe: |
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* free software /as/ contributed to the Gentoo project |
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IMO, if we are going to remove the former distinction, the whole |
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"developed" phrase becomes superfluous, and omitting it doesn't change the |
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meaning. |
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Or.. that looks /too/ simple. Maybe I'm missing something! <g> |
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OK, getting back to the purpose of the two-fold definition anyway, |
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the distinction between software and metadata, keeping in mind the fact |
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that while most of "Gentoo" is metadata on other people's creations, |
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Gentoo does have a few software projects of its own, how about: |
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* free software as /created/ /for/ the Gentoo project |
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or coming back somewhat toward your current wording: |
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* free software /created/ /by/ various developers /for/ the Gentoo project. |
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... or s/created/contributed/ and s/for/to/ |
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* free software contributed by various developers to the Gentoo project. |
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Pardon my thinking in print.. <g> |
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In any case, the existing wording works, even if I think it's a bit |
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grating to my thought process <g>, so the suggestions above are just that, |
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minor suggestions, make use of them or not, as desired. |
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Duncan - List replies preferred. No HTML msgs. |
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"They that can give up essential liberty to obtain a little |
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temporary safety, deserve neither liberty nor safety." -- |
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Benjamin Franklin |
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