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Alan McKinnon posted on Fri, 17 Jul 2015 23:38:44 +0200 as excerpted: |
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>> First off, a new virtual is being introduced, virtual/libmysqlclient. |
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>> virtual/mysql will represent the server (mysqld) and tools (mysqldump, |
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>> mysql, mysqladmin, etc) while virtual/libmysqlclient will represent the |
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>> mysql client shared and static libraries, libmysqlclient.so for |
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>> example. |
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> This reads oddly. There's a "first" but I'm left wondering what the |
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> "second" is, |
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Was just going to point this out myself. |
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1) "First off,", specifically the "off" sounds informal (I checked myself |
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on wiktionary, which lists "first off" as "idiomatic). It's fine, indeed |
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great, for informal conversations, but news items are more formal |
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announcements and should be worded as such. |
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So strike the "off". That leaves simply "First,". |
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2) As Alan mentions, "first" is sequential. Don't use "first" unless |
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your intent is to enumerate a sequential list. That implies you need at |
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least a "second" or "last/finally", if not more than two sequential/ |
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numbered points. |
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That isn't to say you must strike "first" here, if you add further |
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sequence keywords, because such sequential numbering indicates moving on |
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to the next main point, separate from paragraph structure, with such |
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points commonly being found both within a single paragraph if small |
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enough, or with multiple paragraphs per point, as I'm doing here. In |
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fact, such transitional keywords tend to be extremely helpful to the |
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reader, since they do identify the author's intended key points, thus |
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being very helpful when overview- or fast-scanning. |
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(As you see here, I used digit numbering demarced by closing parenthesis, |
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as opposed to the words. That's simply personal preference, tho I |
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believe a convincing argument can be made that it's easier to pick out. |
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Some may argue using the words is more formal, however, and could thus |
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make the same point I made about "first off" above, for the digit |
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choice. YMMV in that regard, but I personally still prefer the digits. |
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Then of course there's the question of whether a ")" or "." demarc is |
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better. As a reader I've absolutely no preference there, but I believe I |
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favor the ")" in my own writing.) |
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Duncan - List replies preferred. No HTML msgs. |
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"Every nonfree program has a lord, a master -- |
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and if you use the program, he is your master." Richard Stallman |